 ShadowMom
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Date: November 21, 2005 @ 10:39 AM
Something you were not ready for...that is one of the saddest things in life. Timing is so important. I'm just glad you two got back together anyway...
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 BOWILLIE
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Date: November 21, 2005 @ 10:41 AM
awww..
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BOWILLIE
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Date: November 21, 2005 @ 10:41 AM
awww..
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BOWILLIE
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Date: November 21, 2005 @ 10:41 AM
awww..
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Ghostie
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Date: November 21, 2005 @ 2:17 PM
 This is heartbreaking and up lifting, at the same time 
because in the end we know that your hearts prevailed
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farfor44
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Date: November 21, 2005 @ 4:29 PM
I love itI'am so glad you two mended your relationshipIt's hard to imagine the world without the institution of Traf and Fox..thank you so much for this
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 songbird
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Date: November 21, 2005 @ 7:08 PM
Just...wow. Brilliant! The words tugged at my heart 
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 FraDonaghy
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Date: November 22, 2005 @ 9:00 AM
Deeply personal and very relatable words here Caroline. I am glad that you guys worked things out, tidied the attic and shed respectively and found what you both were looking for
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Rodrica
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Date: November 22, 2005 @ 10:10 AM
Excellent writing as always  A touch of sadness, yet no finality...the feeling that it is a temporary situation that you both had to go through in order to get where you are today.
I particularly love the lines from "Meanwhile I stored you in my loft..." onwards  Something we can all relate to, on many levels
Love that voice - you always manage to pace the poetry perfectly, and this poem has exactly the right amount of expression. Reading poetry is an art in itself...and you never distract the listener when you speak, you always capture the perfect tone and delivery. Great work! 
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tsand19151
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Date: November 22, 2005 @ 8:03 PM
...yes, that voice. excellent. love the writing. must mention the recording as well, crystal clear. beautiful piece of work.
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 onewhodreams
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Date: November 23, 2005 @ 11:12 PM
Wow... that is moving. "something you were not ready for" What an ending!
Excellent Caroline... beauty it is!
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 gurdonark
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Date: January 21, 2006 @ 8:20 AM
Your delivery is very effective here. The imagery is evocative, as intended.
The sense of mild medias res--that one is not quite in on the entire story--works well here.
"you mislaid me in your shed" and the riff that follows is quite effective.
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Snoogans775
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Date: August 29, 2006 @ 9:20 PM
I really like the upwards feelings at the ends of certain phrases, though the feeling goes down and down as the thought progresses
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