 onewhodreams
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Date: May 30, 2005 @ 7:10 PM
That is deep  Now I see why you call yourself thought-fox   Again, lovely, thought provoking, truthful... perfect!  
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 Snoogans775
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 1:52 AM
I love the thoughts towards the fragile.
This is so well-conceived and like the saying, that which is conceived well, pronounces itself clearly, this is so clear and pristine, while not being blunt or direct.
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 Rodrica
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 7:23 AM
I love your usage of contemporary vocabulary/images without them appearing stark or inelegant. Psychological subjects that could reach back generations are brought up to date with carefully chosen words/phrases. Excellent writing! 
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 furiousBall
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 1:29 PM
the chronolgoical diary entries of the main character is brilliant...the line about bats hanging dormant...great. was this recorded at different times? if so, that's so cool. i got the feeling as if this was truly poetic journal entries strung together to tell this story. the stubborn wall of our divide...great phrase, so true in everyone's life.
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MonnieB
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 3:41 PM
Again, I love, love, love your voice... I love to hear you recite poetry...
Wow... You have such a way with words that seem to flow into one's pounding heart and even though this is a bit of a sad poem to me, you convey it all with such conviction and valor that one would be foolish not to listen... One would be more foolish to have a closed heart, hearing these words...
You are an inspiration to me and i want to thank you for sharing this work with us...
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sqrlcub
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 4:46 PM
Have I told you that I love your poetry? In a lot of Native American mythology the bat is a symbol of secrets, drastic change and potential danger. I like that you use the imagery of the bat and related objects and how it relates to the defendant. It's like he is walking a very tight line.
The journal effect is really potent and powerful. You are a true master of the visual representation of language.
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 dkeifer
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Date: June 6, 2005 @ 9:23 PM
Just beautiful. Your work is so well crafted--like all the different ways you work the collapsed structure metaphor in the third poem. And your reading has really gotten impassioned. I'm so used to poems as being read-off-the-page things, but this is a really great listening experience.
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Hatsy
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Date: July 2, 2005 @ 11:46 AM
Those flown things....
Cut paste, cut paste, cut, cut, cut, cut, oh, a hole...
A darkness under broken rafters, our future....
The feintest tapping....
(These lines are other worldly, but within the whole piece they reign -  of words)
I don't know how to tell you how brilliant you are, I could hug the bones of you if you were here!
Here's my way of describing how this listen made me feel & what your poetry did for me whilst you were reading..
Enchant
Alert
shock (nicely!)
Impress
Delight
Stretch
Teach
Expand
Test
Open
Add
Reason
Enlighten
Acknowledge
Familiar
Unknown
Capture
Freeze
Quantify
Believe
Render speechless  !!
And bloody well makes me proud to know you even in cyberspace, I'm adding your link to every place I can
Thank you 
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Notary04
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Date: August 22, 2005 @ 3:56 PM
I love the extended metaphors! I'm going to have to return continually to this one, for each listen returns something new, whether it be another bit of clever wordplay, or a whole new facet of the story, which is a clear sign of some tight poetry.
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 ShadowMom
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Date: September 29, 2005 @ 8:01 PM
Excellent! That said...but, I tease you just a little bit. I love this one, it's so perfect; words as bats, flown things we cannot take back -- I enjoyed this one quite a lot!
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Engine11RDenny
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Date: October 24, 2005 @ 10:13 PM
Yea  This is the story of my divorce and the ensuing family court battles. The click-delete won't work  If it did I'd erase the whole sorted mess. That faintest tapping was me coming 'round late nights for our rendezvous  guess it's not important now  And that stone we both threw was petty but damaging. Foxy you write awesome stuff this 'poem' seems to be of a new vein - a captured work on fiber optics created for all to live. 
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Ghostie
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Date: October 29, 2005 @ 11:34 AM
A beautiful sad journey through life...and a bit of hope
Love your voice and words overwhelming!!
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strum
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Date: November 5, 2005 @ 11:31 PM
no doubt, deep
really nice and clear... a whole lotta words just fly right by me, i have to think abt it, pause, go back, play again, confirm my ideas, ... THEN continue... not used to such intense work
you shud consider your voice for childrens storytelling cassettes... or considering todays generation... storytelling TV consoles that they sell... w/e they're called
or for ads or something...
cuz i swear, the tone in your voice reminds me of this storytelling tape i used to enjoy back when i was 4 or 5 (kindergarden)
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 tsand19151
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Date: November 30, 2005 @ 7:18 PM
....have to agree with Rodrica, I love your usage of contemporary vocabulary/images..brilliant. Something about that  accent that makes me cling to every word. you have both superb content and delivery.
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farfor44
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Date: January 26, 2006 @ 8:45 PM
Oh those words,we cant get them back after they are spoken sometimes we want to retrieve them but it's not happening....I love this!!!very very good..excellent
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JennyK
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Date: December 17, 2007 @ 9:46 AM
Oh, I am not as good with words as those commenting before me, but if I could I would say what has already been said. Finally, not a minute too soon, I have spent some time on this page. This one struck a chord in me though, as i believe it does with many others.
Thank you!
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