 FraDonaghy
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Date: May 30, 2005 @ 5:51 PM
Some amazing imagery, all expressed brilliantly by your voice. Begins very dark and I especially liked the idea of clouds having "eyes like imploded stars" - very menacing indeed. 
I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us 
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 onewhodreams
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Date: May 30, 2005 @ 6:58 PM
Oh  *frozen dew* rings a bell  . So beautiful Caroline I felt like you were telling how I sometimes feel in the beginning. 
Lovely, just lovely. 
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Snoogans775
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 1:48 AM
I love the pace of your voice, this one flows with a rolling phrase. Where the intensity rises, you insert invasive, and agressive images and thoughts, then in the next moment, we have th glazed eye speaking, enrapturing is what.
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 Rodrica
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 7:19 AM
You always manage to capture the kind of images that I find projected time and again in my own mind...which is probably why I find your poetry so memorable and powerful. Great technique and style used in a very subtle and smooth way. Captivating!
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FraDonaghy
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 7:23 AM
My oh my... Im such a fool Upon re-listening I notice it isn't "Clouds with eyes like imploded stars" but "crowds"  - making it much more impactful.
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 furiousBall
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 1:25 PM
i love the meter of this piece. it's like advice for a sad friend...i love this part..."an ocean could vaporize into tears..."
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MonnieB
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 3:36 PM
Gods, I melt every time I hear your voice... Leaves me shivering every darned time...
Man... This is powerful and so full of beautiful and painful imagery... it reminds me of me... Of how I feel about the world around me and the people inside that world... How I wish it were only a dream... I'm still waiting for that little ray of light to show me that everything is okay...  Just a masterpiece, love...
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sqrlcub
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Date: May 31, 2005 @ 4:48 PM
I think this is in your book. I have to triple check it, but it sounds really familiar. You rock. I'm a little drained after the previous one. I'll respond to it after I've had more time for it to stew. 
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sween
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Date: June 1, 2005 @ 5:14 PM
 You sound great Excellent poem, what more can I say, everyones already said it all. I'll put this on my ipod
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 earlythomas
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Date: June 6, 2005 @ 4:10 PM
This is excellent writing, The lyrics are are sublime indeed. 
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dkeifer
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Date: June 6, 2005 @ 9:18 PM
I love how it's the missing thing that lets in the light.
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freddemillio
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Date: June 12, 2005 @ 10:43 AM
 Wonderful images painted in my mind by the words and a very peaceful atmosphere created by your voice.
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Hatsy
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Date: June 22, 2005 @ 9:59 PM
A real piece of worth indeed and so nice to hear such work read aloud.
Thank you 
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Notary04
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Date: August 22, 2005 @ 3:52 PM
Eyes like imploding stars!? Just a little frightening. I love how you move from ennui-infested, jaded, almost suicidal contemplation, to an optimistic conclusion. You've a beautiful way with words, and the delivery's flawless. Of course, the accent only adds to the striking quality. Wonderful!
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 ShadowMom
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Date: September 29, 2005 @ 7:50 PM
Such a melancholy poem...and then, the last line gives hope. Very well done! Each time I read and listen to it, it seems to gain another dimension. The imagery in this is wonderful!
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BOWILLIE
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Date: October 3, 2005 @ 10:10 AM
exellent..vivid imagery..
spoken and presented with such
eloquence..very nice!
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 madmantharapper
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Date: October 23, 2005 @ 8:11 PM
What the Hell is this shit.
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Ghostie
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Date: October 24, 2005 @ 10:58 PM
A beautiful vision of what is and what might be
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thought-fox
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Date: October 25, 2005 @ 5:20 AM
Hello Madmantharapper. Thank you for your question. This is called 'poetry' ... p-o-e-t-r-y. Try saying it after me "poetry". Well done! Sometimes I use blank verse which doesn't have any rhymes but uses iambic pentameter, and sometimes I use free verse which uses all sorts of devices to take words and use them creatively. There are alliterations, (the first sound at the beginning of the word) assonance (which is a kind of rhyme, but with vowels inside the word) and consonance (which uses the repeating consonants within the words). Sometimes I use end rhymes, sometimes, internal rhymes, and my work has lots of metaphors in it (other ways of saying things about our world). Rap's another form of poetry and I recognize that. I like the work of Eminem. You and I actually have very similar interests - we're using words creatively. I hope this makes things clearer for you.
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FraDonaghy
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Date: October 25, 2005 @ 10:17 AM
 Pure class.
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Rodrica
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Date: October 26, 2005 @ 4:21 AM
I'm with Fra
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BOWILLIE
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Date: October 29, 2005 @ 1:36 PM
i wouldnt have been that nice about it.
shows your pure class!
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PaulMcClelland
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Date: November 7, 2005 @ 9:03 PM
Beautiful interpretation. I have enjoyed your work immensely...PMcC
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hantu
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Date: November 8, 2005 @ 9:20 AM
Wow, this is amazing... had to listen to it a few times... ur english is real good... or is my english just that bad  hmm
I don't know which bit is my favourite part, all so good...
I would have to go with the line "crowds with eye's like imploded starts"
Thankyou for that, and a nice voice you have too, i think this got me brain ticking for a second though 
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gurdonark
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Date: January 21, 2006 @ 8:23 AM
"I know it's me that's losing reason" is a great moment of self-revelation--a crucial shift to convert the poem from mere clever wordplay about the plastique of others' souls into a moment of real connection--of bringing the reader to a deeper place. It redeems this poem--a grining towards rapture--but the elusive extro makes it unclear if we are destined for light, or perhaps only Suffolk.
I like this one.
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