 sqrlcub
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Date: August 19, 2004 @ 11:51 AM
Very visual. The theme of "things accumulate" ties everything together very nicely. The imagery gets consistently darker.
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 onewhodreams
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Date: August 19, 2004 @ 12:19 PM
 I'm sure an alien would be happy to come accross your path  
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 Rodrica
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Date: August 20, 2004 @ 4:50 AM
It's very true...humans are a very "incomplete" species - things lie around never completed and concluded. I can see why an alien would fear us. We trash our own planet...then without taking the time to sort things out on earth, we go about finding other planets where we intend to go and do just the same there! It's as though we've out-grown nature and are no longer part of the natural process that self-regulates and self-cleanses. Amazing poem! 
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 Bogeylyn
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Date: August 20, 2004 @ 5:55 PM
You have such a beautiful voice, so resonant and lilting. I'm mesmerized by it. Your reading is like music.  I'm listening a second time now, to hear the words and voice together.  You are an amazing poet!! I love the images in this, the new way it gives me of looking at the world. It explains my own need to hoard things -- just following the natural tendency of stuff to accumulate. The images in this are so vivid -- the gravestones, the shoes and spectacle frames. I'm reading the words over and over, changed each time by the experience. Haunted by images of our world, especially the last. Yes, how to explain that? I hope you don't mind if I print this out and keep it! I can't get over how good this is! 
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 tsand19151
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Date: August 21, 2004 @ 6:54 PM
this may be my favorite. very relevant content. thought-provoking. visual. your imagination is open-minded and vast. How do we explain to a cosmic pilgrim our strange ways? My dear Lady, this is powerful stuff. Yes, this is my favorite.......
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 Solipsism
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Date: August 23, 2004 @ 7:53 PM
i love the concept behind this one...great abstract thinking. I find it difficult to express how much i enjoy your poetry, trying to find the words to describe words you find as being almost perfect in relation to this piece is no mean task. Again the imagery you portray is stunning, i think the almost abrupt ending was fitting when taken in context with what you were describing...the concentration camps, it was a sharp ending used to maximum effect to make you think about what had been said...i think anyway. another excellent piece of poetry
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 Woof
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Date: August 25, 2004 @ 3:51 AM
Riveting... absolutely riveting... I hadn't expected to be so taken in here, but that I am...
And I have a suspicion I'll be coming back, in the late evening hours, to have the material you've put here console me through the nights... Feels just like you're reading me stories... Beautiful!
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EricTheJohnson
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Date: August 26, 2004 @ 4:21 PM
"But how could I explain ?" wow.....
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kingo
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Date: August 26, 2004 @ 8:30 PM
This is freaking incredible.
Holy crap I got chills at the end of that. Shamefully I hadn't been here to listen to you reciting your stuff yet, and I see I've been missing out. The imagery is so powerful in this.
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GTLive
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Date: September 2, 2004 @ 3:45 PM
My goodness, I do not know what to say.
You can articulate things with language that I can only see eidetically and could not put into words in a billion years. Incredible, and stunning. How to explain, indeed...
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tsand19151
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Date: September 3, 2004 @ 7:13 PM
...fell in love with this.....
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furiousBall
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Date: September 20, 2004 @ 9:40 PM
this reminds me a bit of observations of a comedian for some reason. as if all his or her material was human life but he performed for aliens.
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JudgeMental
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Date: November 17, 2004 @ 7:19 AM
I like the poem a lot and I can relate to the sentiments. I feel the expression in your reading could do with some work though. It came across more like a news bulletin, and I feel you lost a little of the mystery, wonder, and peculiarity of the situation.
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tsand19151
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Date: July 10, 2005 @ 8:11 PM
 keep coming back to this one.... just wonderful....
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 ShadowMom
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Date: October 2, 2005 @ 1:01 AM
Things accumulate...in a slow march toward death, both natural and unnatural. This is just outstanding, building from not the first line, but from the title all the way through. How to explain? I've often wondered that myself.
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Ghostie
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Date: November 14, 2005 @ 12:34 PM
love this!! humans and all our collective stuff! what would 
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zedsalt
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Date: November 18, 2005 @ 4:02 PM
The notion of this world as an accumulation, or even a set of accumulations, struck me as incomplete, made me want to seek out the difference(s) beyond the first thing that came to mind- other manners of change beside and beyond falling together. It was interesting the two areas of accumulation that Webster's Dictionary focused on- earth and evils, material wealth and "causes of misery". I still think accumulation falls short of describing what we are always in the process of becoming, but it's a fine place to start.
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