 dkeifer
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Date: June 10, 2004 @ 1:36 PM
Love how you really push the aquatic imagery, and then make it pay off in the last line. Great piece. 
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 Rodrica
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Date: June 11, 2004 @ 4:44 AM
The use of aquatic metaphors is great - an acknowledgement of our evolution as human beings from fish to 2 legged animals. Great work! 
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 tsand19151
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Date: June 12, 2004 @ 1:47 AM
another great job. very impressive. your style makes one want more.......
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 furiousBall
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Date: June 13, 2004 @ 7:44 AM
love the subject matter (literally) my artist name actually stems from a pregnancy literature
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StefanieNewport
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Date: June 13, 2004 @ 11:41 PM
it ended! it ended way too soon. tsand is right, i want more!!!! love the imagery.
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 chrismacmanus
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Date: June 14, 2004 @ 8:55 AM
ditto to all the above, this is a very sweet and obviously heart-felt poem, the descriptions of the growing foetus were very endearing, reminscent of the old scientific adage that 'ontogeny recapitulates phylogeny'
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thought-fox
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Date: June 14, 2004 @ 9:12 AM
Thanks Chris - just getting my dictionary out!
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sqrlcub
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Date: June 16, 2004 @ 3:41 PM
I don't know why this one creeps me out so much but tarnations, I like it!
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ronnie71
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Date: June 21, 2004 @ 7:18 AM
i used to be a little merman 
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ps-I-forgot
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Date: June 21, 2004 @ 10:48 PM
Quite vivid. Can't really comment much more than that; your words speak for themselves. Lovely work.
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JennyK
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Date: June 23, 2004 @ 11:45 AM
Yes. very vivid, descriptive and lovely. I like this one as it gives me clear images in my mind to go with it. As a painter, i get ideas in my head that ive never had before, new images.. Thank you!
Jen
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 Swampman
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Date: August 4, 2004 @ 10:10 AM
This is great 
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MarcSalmon
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Date: August 9, 2004 @ 7:41 PM
well done fox. another great poem. I wish i could write like this!
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EricTheJohnson
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Date: August 18, 2004 @ 3:16 PM
Outside of my experience (at least the parent portion) yet you gave it to me.
"I come from the water" The Toadies
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 onewhodreams
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Date: August 18, 2004 @ 7:33 PM
 That is beautiful Just beautiful  
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Bogeylyn
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Date: August 21, 2004 @ 2:06 AM
This is wonderful!!! I love the way you capture your unique ways of looking at things and give them to me, like a gift.  That whole metaphor with the burbled plumbing echo just knocks me over! I would never have thought to wonder what a child inside me might hear, or think of it in quite this way. Some of these lines are so fabulous I want to run around with your poems going, "Read this!! Look at this line!!" I get goose bumps with each beautiful, perfect, water metaphor -- the aquarium of my belly! delivered...through broken waters!  Oh! I want to give this to every mother I know! 
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Solipsism
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Date: August 23, 2004 @ 8:11 PM
again the images in this are amazing, the use of metaphor here also is also very impressive, distant music percolating through from another waiting world....i really love that, it's a beautiful line, i never expected it to be about pregnancy and i had to double check to make sure at first...you really threw me on this one, it was another beautifully abstract descriptice piece
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 Woof
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Date: August 25, 2004 @ 3:32 AM
I feel like I'm living inside this one... Again, I get the feeling it's being read just to me, and it's hard to part with the story. It's like I could keep listening, and go deeper... deeper... into the scenes.
Beautiful work, once again...
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Snoogans775
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Date: January 7, 2005 @ 11:23 PM
this is so rich, I looked down, without looking down, and saw, without opening my eyes, my own little merman.
thank you
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farfor44
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Date: May 29, 2005 @ 8:46 PM
Water..A drink for all life..Thank you
so much for this wonderful piece,It's
just beautiful...
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 ShadowMom
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Date: October 3, 2005 @ 11:57 PM
I must admit the title fooled me; and yet it is perfect. Brings back memories, it does.The last line is so intense, it is painful. But there's no way we would give it up, is there?
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Engine11RDenny
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Date: November 17, 2005 @ 9:49 AM
I love this I believed I could hear the same burbled plumbing echo as you: distant music percolating through
from another, waiting world. - I know this is Mom & Child - however I used to think I could hear my friends in the neighborhood taking their night time baths if I listened under there  This beautiful Poem makes me think of the most important thing in my life - I can remember looking at my Daughter Beth through the "Ultrasound Submarine" And I was scared for her too - "so afraid of the air to your new lungs" was exactly what I was feeling as the nurse washed her off. Then I felt 10 feet tall at that moment now I do again - thanks Caroline 
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 karimv123
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Date: April 9, 2006 @ 5:35 PM
very nice ! well done
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